07 April 2011

EJE Leads

Here are some of my leads. I guess:

Descriptive:

1) Already at his drums, Suren de Saram of Bombay Bicycle Club waits for the rest of the band to come on. The small crowd of hipsters cheers when every guitar is tuned and Jack Steadman begins to quietly sing, gaining energy with each note. By the end, he's headbanging during Jamie MacColl and Ed Nash's guitar and base solos. After, many of the listeners offer to buy him drinks, but he declines, as the musician of five years is not even of legal age.

Now and Then:

2) Five years ago, Bombay Bicycle Club meant a bicycling group in India. Five years ago, Jack Steadman, Jamie MacColl, Suren de Saram, and Ed Nash were 15 and in high school. Five years ago, these four boys had no idea they'd be traveling to different music festivals around a foreign country to perform.

But now they're living their once teenage dream, just like many other artists who were once playing in their mom's garage.

3) Five years ago, The Canals walked onto stage at their school; it was just another school talent show. The four boys making up The Canals weren't attempting to be a band, they only wanted to play the instruments they loved.

Now, the four young men are still playing the instruments they love, they're just doing it under the name Bombay Bicycle Club and for their over one hundred thousand fans around the globe.

Here's what I really want to do, but kinda is not what you're supposed to:

Imagine what it's like to be hit by a bus while riding your bike on a river and die.
Jack Steadman has to imagine too. He's just the lead singer in the British band, Bombay Bicycle Club, not Jesus.

Since the beginning of time, there have been hippos. But not really, we don't care about hippos here. We just care about Bombay Bicycle Club, an indie band from Britain.

Oxygen has 8 protons. Jack Steadman, lead singer of the British band Bombay Bicycle Club, breathes oxygen. He's just like us.

Against all odds, Jack Steadman has survived the black plague. He wasn't alive then when it was a pandemic though, he's alive now and in a band!

13 comments:

  1. "Already at his drums, Suren de Saram of Bombay Bicycle Club since the band started 5 years ago waits for the rest of the band to come on." That doesn't make sense...I would take out that "since the band started 5 years ago part". :P Also I would change "crowd of hipsters" to "army of hipsters" since that's what I originally read it as. XD XD

    Also, NEVER EVER EVER have an "imagine..." lead...that's one of the things we learned at ILPC in Journalism. XD I like the one about the hippos, except for I kind of disagree with it because HIPPOS ARE AMAZING. AND I CARE ABOUT THEM.

    /end random comment

    ~K

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  2. Kendall: I just wanted to somehow get in there tha they started at age 15, therefore making my readers insignificant.

    I know, that was the point :) She told us not to do that, anything cliche, or simple facts.

    - EJE

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  3. I had to find post on this computer. I liked the twist type of thing on the 1st one.

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  4. Number one... again...

    Good description and the readers can see the scene in their minds. It is also imo the most interesting

    daniel

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  5. One is the best, it really lets the reader feel what the band is like and makes you want to read more about these young, successful musicians.

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  6. I like the second. It's the most shocking and interesting and the repetition adds rhythm to your article.
    -Clyde

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  7. I think the third lead may be a twist.

    second one probably works the best.

    First one is also pretty decent.

    --
    Quaver from Aux Cable (AS)

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  8. I like the first one, too. Nice job with the twist -- it's interesting that they're old enough and talented enough to play in a bar but can't drink yet.

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  9. I like the first and second ones (:

    <3 nat attack

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  10. I like the first and second ones the most. Although I think the first needs to be re-worded because after reading that, I am under the idea that the musician is 5 years old....Is that correct?

    -Fly on the Wall

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  11. The description in the first is nice.

    ~ OMO

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  12. One. Love the alcohol comment ^^ It's cute...

    --IBI

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